Comments on: Solitude http://arachnid.wordpress.com/2007/11/06/solitude/ This is where I share all my intellectual cerebrations. These thoughts are, more often than not, about films, literature, art, aesthetics, music and - well - some shades of other pieces of my mind. Thu, 21 Aug 2008 14:22:18 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=MU By: Trinath http://arachnid.wordpress.com/2007/11/06/solitude/#comment-696 Trinath Thu, 10 Jul 2008 05:36:39 +0000 http://arachnid.wordpress.com/2007/11/06/solitude/#comment-696 The ending is too good ! I mean has a very free flowing structure to it. But in the lines "like the soft drops of silent dew on brown leaves soft beneath my yearning feet." The repetition of the word "soft" appears rather strange. You could have used "on brown leaves underneath , my yearning feet" <b>Reply:</b> Thank you for your comment Trinath, and many more thanks to you for pointing out the weakness in those lines. - <i>ritwik</i> Nice poem all together ! The ending is too good !
I mean has a very free flowing structure to it.

But in the lines
“like the soft drops of silent dew
on brown leaves soft beneath
my yearning feet.”

The repetition of the word “soft” appears rather strange. You could have used “on brown leaves underneath , my yearning feet”

Reply: Thank you for your comment Trinath, and many more thanks to you for pointing out the weakness in those lines.

- ritwik

Nice poem all together !

]]> By: tinarathore http://arachnid.wordpress.com/2007/11/06/solitude/#comment-632 tinarathore Fri, 29 Feb 2008 15:46:04 +0000 http://arachnid.wordpress.com/2007/11/06/solitude/#comment-632 hi ritwik. i've followed this link from the caferati blog, the introduction column to be precise and let me tell you i'm glad i did. i really liked your poems.... hi ritwik. i’ve followed this link from the caferati blog, the introduction column to be precise and let me tell you i’m glad i did. i really liked your poems….

]]> By: tinarathore http://arachnid.wordpress.com/2007/11/06/solitude/#comment-631 tinarathore Fri, 29 Feb 2008 15:45:21 +0000 http://arachnid.wordpress.com/2007/11/06/solitude/#comment-631 there is a stunning imagery here... your use of simile is what striked me "like morning mist caressing the grass on a faded village road in childhood,"," like the soft drops of silent dew on brown leaves soft beneath my yearning feet". every image, simile, word form a collective whole to bring the feeling of yearning...so b'fully expressed in this poem. the lines " I shall feel the clasps of unknown hands on the silent silent gasps in my language" are strikingly haunting. it is a haunting play of subconscious that solitude brings...the best i've ever read on solitude. <b>Reply:</b> Thank you Tina. :) I am glad I have been able to convey the haunt-factor (!!) with some effect here. - <i>ritwik</i> there is a stunning imagery here… your use of simile is what striked me “like morning mist caressing the grass on a faded village road in childhood,”,” like the soft drops of silent dew
on brown leaves soft beneath my yearning feet”.
every image, simile, word form a collective whole to bring the feeling of yearning…so b’fully expressed in this poem. the lines ” I shall feel the clasps of unknown hands
on the silent silent gasps in my language” are strikingly haunting. it is a haunting play of subconscious that solitude brings…the best i’ve ever read on solitude.

Reply: Thank you Tina. :) I am glad I have been able to convey the haunt-factor (!!) with some effect here.

- ritwik

]]> By: Teodora http://arachnid.wordpress.com/2007/11/06/solitude/#comment-592 Teodora Sun, 30 Dec 2007 09:16:26 +0000 http://arachnid.wordpress.com/2007/11/06/solitude/#comment-592 Wonderful Blog <b>Reply:</b> Thank you Teodora! :-) Always a pleasure to provide a decent reading for the visitors! - <i>ritwik</i> Wonderful Blog

Reply: Thank you Teodora! :-) Always a pleasure to provide a decent reading for the visitors!

- ritwik

]]> By: harmonie22 http://arachnid.wordpress.com/2007/11/06/solitude/#comment-507 harmonie22 Wed, 14 Nov 2007 22:12:23 +0000 http://arachnid.wordpress.com/2007/11/06/solitude/#comment-507 Ritwik that was beautiful. you've got some great images too. My favorite is "morning mist caressing the grass on a faded village road in childhood" I really appreciate and relate the stifled language image / theme too. <b>Reply:</b> Thank you, Harmonie, for the encouraging comment. I personally think that in spite of several images that are beautiful in themselves, the poem as a whole is jittery. I am especially uncomfortable with the sudden jump in tone from the first to the second stanza. - <i>ritwik</i> Ritwik that was beautiful. you’ve got some great images too. My favorite is “morning mist caressing the grass
on a faded village road in childhood”

I really appreciate and relate the stifled language image / theme too.

Reply: Thank you, Harmonie, for the encouraging comment. I personally think that in spite of several images that are beautiful in themselves, the poem as a whole is jittery. I am especially uncomfortable with the sudden jump in tone from the first to the second stanza.

- ritwik

]]> By: allirekha http://arachnid.wordpress.com/2007/11/06/solitude/#comment-502 allirekha Sat, 10 Nov 2007 14:38:45 +0000 http://arachnid.wordpress.com/2007/11/06/solitude/#comment-502 nice one.., reading the poems u have writen before..im sure u can do better,even if i am none to say abt ur awesome works :) <b>Reply:</b> Thanks Rekha! Don't say that you are nobody to say anything about my works. If they are good, it's because of readers like you appreciate them! - <i>ritwik</i> nice one.., reading the poems u have writen before..im sure u can do better,even if i am none to say abt ur awesome works
:)

Reply: Thanks Rekha! Don’t say that you are nobody to say anything about my works. If they are good, it’s because of readers like you appreciate them!

- ritwik

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